Rewrite sentences with a parallel structure, cutting words when necessary.
Our department must make a recommendation concerning this proposal by Monday. Please bring together those to whom we sent the draft for review and call a meeting to work out final issues before I write our recommendation. Before the meeting I want you to prepare an agenda, also you are reviewing the proposal, and any outstanding questions that it raises should be listed. When you invite them to the meeting, please notify the appropriate people that we still need a definite legal opinion, to assemble the financial statement that is most current, and complete patent documentation. With all this information at the meeting, we should be able to develop a final recommendation. Thank you.
© 1997, Executive Writing, Diamond, Fahey, p. 49