Too much detail
In reviewing the personnel history form you filled out last week, I found an error that needs to be corrected. The section titled “work history” has blank lines for three items of information. The first is for dates employed. The second is for company name. And the third is for type of work performed. On your form you wrote company name only, and it extended across all three blanks. You did not indicate years employed or your duties. This information is important. It is reviewed by your supervisors every time you are considered for promotion or for a pay increase. Therefore, it must be completed. I request that you come by my office and complete this form as soon as you have time.
Please come by my office as soon as you have time to correct an error in the personnel form you filled out last week.